Advice:
Don't write in generalities. Want to drive your professors nuts? Want to totally illustrate to them that you have no idea what you're talking about? Then keep your writing vague and generic.
Examples -
"Many people in this world find beauty all around them." Really? Why don't you tell us something we don't know.
"What is beautiful to one person may be ugly to another." Really? Thanks for the blinding flash of insight!
How to cure this:
Drill down to specifics. Remember, this is ultimately a personal definition essay. The main word their is personal. SHOW ME WHAT YOU REALLY, PERSONALLY THINK. SHOW US A UNIQUELY PERSONAL DEFINITION OF BEAUTY TAKEN FROM EITHER YOUR LIFE OR FROM YOUR UNIQUE PERSPECTIVE ON THE WORLD.
Examples -
* I'm sorry that many PC junkies will hate this, but the truth is simple: every apple product is beautiful in that there is absolutely no wasted designing. Everything on an iPad, iPod, or MacBook Air serves the function of making the product easy to use and aesthetically appeasing.
* The is beauty in death. I know this is hard to fathom, but the morning my father died from lung cancer was beautiful. After his passing, the family gathered in the adjacent waiting room to wait for the funeral home director. We began telling stories about Dad. Soon everyone in that room had tears in their eyes. Not because we were sad. Rather because we knew we had been blessed to have Dad in our lives.
In fact, the funeral home director actually did a double take before entering the room. He couldn't believe we were in as good of spirits as we were. We were wrapped in beauty. We were celebrating Dad's life.
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